Hmm.... Sorry if this comes across as rude, but I feel like this episode highlights something that you might wish to have a look at.
What's the intended audience for this series? Currently, of course, you don't have one (or barely have one), but it's something to think about. Your reading out the mission description and explaining what a phase ship is and stuff like that implies you're aiming towards a broader audience, one that doesn't really need to know what starsector is. However, you then casually mentions the Eagle cruiser when comparing its armor with that of the Doom, without really telling the audience what the Eagle is or what the significance of it is. You also mention "harpoons" (as opposed to, say, Harpoon classes missiles), 1500 range (without really saying how long that is), CR and malfunction (without explaining those concepts), etc. which suggest to me that you're almost talking to the veteran starsector crowd. If you're looking to cater more to the outsider crowd, might pay to mind your vocabulary a bit more (understandable that you'd be used to these concepts, of course, being a veteran, but still).
I am also probably being overly grumpy here, but I didn't quite like how much you were laughing during the mission (yeah yeah.... I know.... how dare you have fun...). idk, I found it slightly off-putting but it's very much a personal opinion thing so feel free to disregard that bit.
Finally, Since you asked, I would like to see you failing, but maybe after a couple tries you can cut to a success and just put down the number of attempts at the end or something
Hope these have been constructive criticisms